The perfect shadow around his neck [/quote]
This sounds like the beginning of a paragraph in a romance novel, and I’m not talking about thorax necks here. [/quote]
50 Shades of Shadows Part 1…
We could be rich Beans![/quote]
I’m not so sure I can write sex scenes for women…
mounds of flesh, her inner ribbons moist with anticipation of his touch…
Yeah… I couldn’t write that shit sober or with a straight face. [/quote]
No, please… continue.
Wait until after 5 o’clock please…[/quote]
His hands, rough and beaten from years of labor, slowly trailed up her thigh. The slight tickle sent waves of heat through her, starting deep within her soul, traveling through her, gushing out of his ultimate destination. Her love curtains were swollen in anticipation of his rugged hands arrival. [/quote]
While I do think that you bring in the physical sensation of his scarred experienced hands on her soft, vulnerable skin quite nicely, I think you need to bring in some emotional tension too:
His eyes, which were so kind and gentle, until now, ravished her with a piercing glare and his hands moved as if guided by nature herself and she knew that she could not stop him, even if she wanted too…
Or some such. [/quote]
There is emotions involved in sex?