While I'm not sure this dude is in any position to take pot shots at you, he does have a point.
Posing is a bitch, and the better you get at it, the better you will look.
You kind of look awkward, for lack of a better word, and don't really do yourself justice with that pose, imo.
gmoore is right.
Also, a tan will help too. From one pasty guy to another...