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Training Phoenix


#1

I just wrote this last night. Sounded ok and thought I'd share. Maybe it sucks and I don't know it.

My body shakes beneath the weight,
I break myself on bar and plate.

Mind of metal and iron will,
I push myself to go on still.

I wilt with sweat and muscle torn,
but each day I am reborn.

But each day I keep returning,
I am the Phoenix, my Body burning.


#2

"muscle torn" Made me think about injury (not good) and yes I do understand the reference.

"But each day" Two of those in a row.. sounds a little off.

Otherwise a wicked shorty. :smiley:


#3

Man. I didn't even notice those back to back. Does sound way off. That's why it's nice to have others read it. Thanks.