Good starting point, lots to work on.
Shoulders are way out of position - need to engage the lats to position the shoulder almost like you might in the bench with them pulled back and down. Obviously not with the goal of making a big arch, but with the goal of trying to mover your shoulder down into your lats. No more of this lifting with loose back and weird shrugging to finish the lift.
Knees out - they are forcing hte bar too far in front. Also, this poor external rotation of the hips, paired with poor shoulder position makes it so that you are lifting over top of the bar. You should be setup BEHIND the bar.
Tighten the back and entire rear chain - as you set up to lift hte bar off the floor, you need to lever off the bar to create maximal tension in the posterior chain, paired with tight lats to make traps to hamstring tight. Using the bar as a lever will bring the hips lower, closer to the bar, improve back angle, and enable a proper motor path for the deadlift - the deadlift is two distinct phases that flow smoothly together. The first being a drive through the floor to extend the knees with a static back angle. Then, if you are in good position, the hips shift forward to lock out the bar. This will in involve all cues I have mentioned (knees, lats, hips down, tight posterior chain, etc.) then having patience to lift the bar off the floor in this position and maintain it until the bar is crossing the knees which is when the knees are locking and the hips then slip forward into lockout.